To be honest not much of my family has made it far in school. My mother
and father didn't make it to college I know that my mother tried but she
just couldn't. The priority has always been work and money. Despite my
family's views and unsatisfying history, I see myself to be successful
and well accomplished. The difference between them and I is my love for
education and my willingness to work hard. I understand that education
is a privilege and I cherish every amount of it.
I expect myself to attend a good university and succeed academically.
The major I have chosen is chemical engineering. I fell in love with
chemistry the moment I walked into the class in 10th grade. Predictably,
my teacher was the one to really open my eyes to the subject. I found
myself working extraordinarily hard in that class and enjoyed every
second of it including the test taking. I have sure plans. I want to
make a difference in the world. Is there a better way to live life?
Whether it's creating something chemically or fixing something
chemically I will somehow help humanity. Even now I look up to all those
who have helped the lives of others.
I also have other things I'd like to excel in, that aren't quite
academic. I am a cheer leader. Currently I'm in high school cheer leading
and all-star cheer. Cheer is my life. I'm exceptionally good at it. I
plan to be a professional cheerleader, I really do. People find it hard
to believe but it's something I really want to do. I won't change my
mind about it. Also there is photography I don't want to be a
professional photographer but I want to take a college class in the
subject.
To achieve such goals I know I need to be well rounded academically and
physically. I need to be confident in myself every way possible. My
mother and father fully support me. Especially because she doesn't want
me to make the same mistakes she once had. I'm really truly grateful for
the support and kindness everyone has bestowed upon me. I will do or be
something or someone great. I know I can.
Demonstrates a well thought out and smooth essay. This essay is not a run on and captivates the reader. Few grammar errors exists. Such as in paragraph two you should have written, "I expect that.." rather than," I expect from myself," because you are already speaking in the first person. Other than that, this essay proves to be insightful such as your closing sentence," I will do or be something or someone great. I know i can."
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